Comments on Kakos' 1st Hour English 10: If you really knew me...

Amy- good descriptions of how the cupcakes smellLe...

2007-01-24T21:02:00.000-08:00

Amy- good descriptions of how the cupcakes smell

Leah- I liked when you said "I gained some mediocre art skills and a new friend"

Jake- You told your story well, a lot of people got chills or felt like crying- they felt your pain

Sara- I liked how you described the way the fish reacted to your family

Collin- good description of the crisp air, I knew exactly what you meant

Lauren- it had amazing description, I hate to be alone like that

Aly- good description of what you felt like before you passed out

Glen- that would be amazing to travel as much as you do

Kevin- used the movie theme...compared it ot your story

Matt- prickly grass and cold breeze, i could almost feel the itchy grass

David- people dancing in happiness

Saryn- good cliff hanger

Blake- making lunch plans reminds me of what I do

Ben- "if I could only get an IPod and nothing else I wouldn't care"...I've felt like this I know exactly what you mean

Keith- good description of getting lost (nervous)

Bryce- "heat slithered through me", at different people really showed your anger

Kayla- I liked how open you were, most people wouldn't just tell anybody that

Amy:This made me think of the day I met DEVO!Leah:...

2007-01-24T19:55:00.000-08:00

Amy:This made me think of the day I met DEVO!

Leah:The way u described you were homesick was really powerful because I feel like that sometimes.

Collin:Good dicription of the sky.

Aly:Really powerful that you had that problem I never thought about how when teenagers drink a lot its really an alcohol problem.

Glenn:It was really cool to know that you have been to all those places and the 50 states.

Sara:Fish are sort of gross looking and feeling!!

Kevin:Really suprising that you didnt get hurt really bad and a shoe saved you.

Jake:Never have lost anyone in an accident but I am really sorry and hope it will help you to choose good decisions while driving.

Matt:Like the golf corse description it was like I was there

David:I was suprised you actually said you were on drugs.

Julianna:Water does have a good taste if someones thirsty enough.

Kendra:I can relate a lot to your story and how you can become so close to someone or a group of people.

Jade:Pretty amazing poem!

Kaitlan:Really crazy how you let people into the house to stay.

Josh:I like to roast marshmellows too! haha

Gabe:Does paintball hurt? I want to try it sometime!

James:What lax team were you on last year?

Jess:I like George Strait and Alan Jackson did you know George is coming to Denver soon?

Molly:It almost feels like I'm there and imagine the big sky of stars.

Margaux:Sounds like a lot of fun to do. I want to try it.

Alyssa B:What were talking about?? Sorry.

Nathan:I want to drive on the auto bond and I want to try that drink you were talking about.

Brigid:I was confused??

Madi:Pretty crazy stuff!

Saryn:That sounded really scary I would have ran away and I wanted to hear more!

Blake:I can relate to the first day of school feeling.

Ben:ipods are sweet!!

Keith:So I hate sweaty hands!

Bryce:Getting held back would really suck. What grade did you get held back in?

Kayla:You are a really brave person I hope you get better and the cancer never comes back!!

Amy: You described things very well and I liked ho...

2007-01-24T19:46:00.000-08:00

Amy: You described things very well and I liked how you said you were hypnotized by Zoolander because it fits with the movie so it's ironic.
Leah: I felt like I was really there with you, very descriptive.
Jake: I liked that you choose something close to home and that was really important.
Sara: I liked that your fear sounded crazy, but once you explained it made sense. It was really funny to listen to.
Collin: It was really interesting hearing your thoughts on that subject.
Lauren: "like a giant warhead candy" I liked how you described things.
Aly: "I didn't realize that this was poison going down my throat" Very personal and descriptive.
Glen: That's really cool that you've been to all those places.
Kevin: "by the mercy of god" very scary experience but cool, its cool that you call them your lucky shoes.
Matt: Very cool experience absorbing the night sky on the golf course.
David: “The boat motor grinding into my thoughts” I liked how in your story you described everyone around you happy and you weren’t.
Juliana: You describe everything so beautifully.
Kendra: I liked your subject, you had a lot to say about it.
Jade: It was a really cute poem and it rhymed and everything.
Katlan: Very personal I didn’t know that about you.
Josh: Very descriptive, I felt like I was there.
Gabe: It was funny how I was really wondering what it was, good job!
James: I like how you said I like to play lax because you like to hit people.
Jess: I liked how you really explained yourself, it told me a lot about you.
Molly: Very descriptive I felt like I was there.
Margaux: I liked how you said “Cheap Motels” very descriptive.
Alyssa: I love that you said the sun kissed the Star of David.
Nathan: “collapsed in the soft beds” very descriptive.
Madi: I know what it’s like to loose a cousin, it was a really nice piece to hear.
Saryn: I really like this piece, it’s really good and I’m not just saying. Everything is very descriptive and flows well.
Blake: “the five minute bell chimed” I like how you put that.
Ben: I liked how you wrote about something you liked.
Keith: Very descriptive, it felt like I could see you.
Bryce: I liked how you shared something personal.
Kayla: It must be really hard for you, I don’t think I could go through something like that.

Amy S: I like how descriptive you were "pea’s in a...

2007-01-24T17:43:00.000-08:00

Amy S: I like how descriptive you were "pea’s in a pod", and "swirl of chocolate and sprinkles...blast of cold water".
Jake Rita showed how sad you were, "my day, my week, every thing up to now is ruined", and I could feel what you were going through.
Sara B: I loved the part when you said that "the fish had it in for you", and it turned out it was just your mom.
Collin L: Your story really made me think about the world and the universe and how "we mean nothing, no impact".
Lauren: You were very descriptive of how you felt "crushed my self esteem to dust".
Aly E: I like your word choice, like "sensational high".
Glen: I like when you said "making noon dark"... I felt like I was there.
Kevin C: I loved when at the end of your story you said "and get this...she gave me ice cream!"
Matt: I liked when you said how you felt "the grass felt prickly but we didn't care, it was the best."
David: Again, I like description, "the cold night air chills me to the core".
Julianna D: My favorite part was when you said you were on a cloud and "the world was at my [your] feet."
Kendra: I know what you were going through, "I knew things would never be the same between us".
Jade: I loved it! "Standing there in converse shoes".
Kaitlan: So sad! When you said how they "shake and hurt" and how you "never want to go through what they did."
Josh C: Very descriptive!
Gabe: It surprised me when you said it was a paintball gun... it made me laugh.
James: Good job.
Jessie: I like your word choice like the word “corky”!
Molly: I like how you described the way the waves crashed onto the shore… I wanted to go to the beach!
Margaux: Good descriptions…”slight buzzing sound of hungry mosquitos”
Alyssa: Good descriptions!
Nathan: I wanted to be there…”new sights, smells, and sounds to take in”.
Brigid: I liked it! How you said “my spirit needs to be boosted up… when I need to laugh”
Madi: Like everyone said it was sad! It made me think about my siblings.
Blake: I felt bad for you… a new school, and no group to be in! You’re to cool to belong to a “group” or be “labeled” Blake.
Ben: I like how you said you needed an Ipod, “the one thing I needed in my 14 years of existence.”
Keith: Good descriptions “the nervousness taking over my body”.
Bryce: It had to feel pretty bad being held back and you told your story well!

Amy: I liked the way you described smelling and ta...

2007-01-24T16:10:00.000-08:00

Amy: I liked the way you described smelling and tasting of the cupcakes.
Jake: I can relate to your loss of your friends. I lost my cousin when he was young too.
Leah: I can relate to your situation of being in a new school with no friends. It's happened four different times; I felt that I was always the new kid.
Sara: I like the way you described how the fish touched you. Also when you told us about the fish in the dolphin tank.
Collin: I like how you said that humans are worthless compared to the universe.
Lauren: I can relate to your moving, I have moved to six different schools and eleven different houses thought out my life so far.
Aly: I love how described how you feel when your drunk and what it was like when you almost died.
Glen: I like how you described what the different places were like. I can relate to wanting to see new places, I want to get out and see the world too.
Kevin: I liked how you described the fall in detail and the reaction of your mom and sister.
Matt: I like how you said what it felt like on the golf course.
David: I like how you described how you felt when you heart was breaking because of a girl.
Julianna: I like how you described all of your accomplishments.
Kendra: I can relate to when you moved from 8th to 9th. That’s how I felt when I moved from 5th to 6th.
Jade: I love how you described you love in a poem.
Kaitlan: I can relate to you and you situation with your dad. My dad also is a recovering alcoholic. I know it’s hard, I’m glad that I didn’t know mine when he was going through this tough time.
Josh: I like how you described your time in the mountains. I can relate to you because every summer I go to camp and it’s in the middle of the woods.
Gabe: I like how you described the excitement of getting a gift you really wanted.
James: I can relate to you, I to wanted to play a new sport.
Jessie: I love how you described what its like to have a passion for singing, I too love to sing and someday want to become a professional singer.
Molly: I love how you described the smells and sounds.
Margaux: I liked how u described the sounds of the bugs around you.
Alyssa: I like how you described the breathtaking sunsets.
Nathan: I love hoe you described the tastes and smells in Europe.
Brigid: I love how you described the sounds of music entering your soul!
Saryn: I LOVE how you described how you body was reacting to the stranger and how scared you were. Nice ending too!
Blake: I like hoe you say that all you wanted for Christmas was an iPod and nothing else.
Keith: I like the image of the sweaty hands and how you felt.
Bryce: I felt the same way you did when you got held back, but I was lucky enough to go to a new school.
Kayla: That’s so sad and I’m very sorry, you described how you felt very well.

Amy s.- really descriptive adjectivesLeah j- I lik...

2007-01-24T06:58:00.000-08:00

Amy s.- really descriptive adjectives

Leah j- I like the nervous description.

Jake- that’s sad

Sara b- I’m sorry your scared of fish but good descriptions

Colin- descriptive adjectives

Lauren- I can really relate to this

Aly – scary

Glen- good job

Kevin- I like how you put the focus on the ice cream

Matt- good job

David c- interesting sorry

Julianna- good descriptions

Kendra – good descriptions I really had to use my senses

Jade- wow just wow I don’t even know what to say. I’m stunned and really think you look good today. Gosh I’m shocked.

Kaitlan- sad

Josh- the wind descriptions were good

Gabe- I love paintball I have an a5! We should go

James- lacrosse is fun

Jessica- good luck

Molly I like the description of the sky

Margaux – I hate cheap motels. They remind me of serial killers.

Alyssa – I like the description of gold
Nathan – my family is from the Czech Republic you probably met them they look like me and smell good.

Brigid – good description

Madi – I’m sorry.

Saryn – scary! What happened?

Blake – good description of silence

Ben - I love m iPod

Keith – I like your description of nervous

Bryce – I got held back too and I love it.

Kayla- that’s weak im sorry! I hope you get better

Amy S.- I like how you described the room; it was ...

2007-01-24T06:57:00.001-08:00

Amy S.- I like how you described the room; it was very clear and you really showed the room.

Jake R.- I like how you described you emotions of everything. Nice word choice.

Sara B.- It is good how you want to over come your fear.

Collin L.- I like all the questions and info; plus all the description

Lauren L.-Wow, the description of your year was amazing

Aly E.- Your story is incredible; very well written, good job

Glen L.- good job with all the details, the description, the description helped lots to see it.

Kevin- your story was really great to listen too, nice job

Matt- I can see you doing that, sounds like a good story

David C.- The description of the water and air was great. Nice

Kendra V.- I like how close you described your friendship.

Jade B.- I love the description in
a poem form, incredible.

Kaitlan W.- The detail is really good and how you have a life lesson.

Josh C.- I like the description of the camp. I could picture it.

Gabe W.- I like the mystery until the end shows through

James N.- I like how you have lots of details and it shows how you love lacrosse.

Jessica W.- Your descriptive words really show how much you love singing. Nice!

Molly K.- I can really picture you there; sounds like lots of fun!

Margaux L.- Sounds like a fun trip! I could see the mosquitoes around you.

Alyssa B.- I like how you described the world and the shinning of the Star of David.

Nathan W.- I can see you going at a fast mood and overwhelmed. Good job.

Brigid I.- I like how you described yourself with music

Madi F.- That is sad, but good job showing your emotions.

Saryn S.- Just the little bits that added to the story kept me wanting to know what happens!

Blake H.- Good job showing what you felt that day and the details helped.

Ben E.- I could really see you “needing” the iPod.

Keith S.- I like how you wrote about how nervous you were. Good job.

Bryce- The description was great! I could see you being there. Nice!

Kayla- That sounds scary. I’m glad you’re okay for now!

Amy S. –You went into detail really well and it de...

2007-01-24T06:57:00.000-08:00

Amy S. –You went into detail really well and it described your senses good.

Jake R. – Good description and I am sorry that happened.

Leah J. – I thought your story was very cute.

Collin L. -Really good description and word choice.

Lauren L. – Really good verbs and description.

Aly E. - Good job describing how you felt.

Glenn L. – That is really cool that you have been so many places, good job explaining things.

Kevin N. – Cute story, good description and word choice.

Matt D. – Good explaining things and good word choice.

David C. – good word choice and drew a vivid picture in my mind.

Julianna D. - your description of your experience is really good it made me seem like I was there.

Kendra V. – Good story and good word choice.

Jade B. – Your poem was so cute and your really good at writing.

Kaitlan W. – I thought that your story was very good and the way you worded things was really good.

Josh C. – I thought that your writing flowed very well.

Gabe W. – Good job with your writing it was clever.

James – I thought that it was good.

Jessica W. - I thought it was good and I think your goals are good and hopefully you will meet those goals.

Molly K. – Good description of your senses I thought it was really good.

Margaux L. – Really good description and word choice it was good.

Alyssa B. – Your description was very good and it drew a very clear and vivid picture in my mind.
Nathan W. – I thought your story was really good!

Brigid I. – I thought the way that you worded things was very good and descriptive.

Madi F. – I thought your story was really good and I’m sorry that happened.

Saryn – I thought that the story was really good and it made a really clear picture.

Blake H. – Really good description and word choice.

Ben – I thought that it was really good and I liked how you worded things.

Keith – Good description and wording the way you felt.

Bryce – I thought you did a really good job with your writing.

Kayla – I really think that you did a good job and I hope everything goes ok.

THIS IS LEAH:POSITIVE NOTESSPirate H.:your descrip...

2007-01-24T06:56:00.003-08:00

THIS IS LEAH:

POSITIVE NOTESS

Pirate H.:your description of taste was really good. Congrats on finding a best friend!

Jake:
WOW he has it in his head! That was amazing, and a really good telling of the story.
To Jake—I am so sorry about your friends. That must have been so hard.

Sara:
I think that is a really interesting fear and kind of sad that your family makes fun of you. I understand your fear because fish can be creepy some times. Good luck with your certification!

Collin:
You are an amazing writer; you are really good at describing. GOOD JOB!

Lauren:
That was a really good story, I am really sorry about what happened to you. I sort of know how you feel because I had no friends when I came to Arapahoe.

Aly:
Wow, I never even would picture you as an alcoholic but congratulations on your success. Witch is sort of the wrong thing to say because as I know it’s a everyday struggle. My whole family has struggled with alcoholism and it is so good you stopped now because the affect it has on your loved ones is devastating. So good luck :]

Glen:
That’s cool. My family travels a lot to and I’ve been to Australia and New Zealand twice. It’s really fun and you will have a good time this summer.

Kevin:
That’s amazing! You are so lucky, I’m sure you know that. You were really good at describing to.

Matt:
Your really good at describing! It was really easy to picture this scene.

David:
Your description of this story was amazing and beautiful. And sorry about that girl, what a whore!

Juliana: Congratulations! That’s a really good accomplishment, my brother became a black belt about a year ago and I know how hard it is, so good job!

Kendra: That was really touching! I know how you feel I moved schools in between middle school and high school. It’s really hard but I am glad that you did move cause then we met! Woo hoo!

Jade: That was so amazing kid! You are really good at writing and I know that Megan knows this but she is so lucky and you guys are both so sweet and nice. I am so glad were friends!

Kaitlan: That is really powerful and inspiring. As I mentioned in one of my other comments some people in my immediate family struggle with those problems and it’s really hard. But it makes you so proud when they recover. Tell your aunt congratulations!

Josh: That sounds so fun! You’re really lucky to have experiences like that :]

Gabe: that’s cute, my brother loves paintball and I know that it’s a big deal to get a gun. Have fun!

James: Wow, it sounds like you’re really naturally talented. I hope you go far.

Jessie: That’s so cool that you can sing! I really wish I could sing, I think it’s a really amazing talent. Good luck on your path and don’t let anyone tell you that you can’t and never ever ever give up!

Molly: You descriptions of your senses were really vivid you are a really really good writer. I wish you would have read more because the section that you read was really good.

Margaux: Good story! I love white water rafting to! That really cool that you get to spend your one on one time with your dad.

Alyssa: Wow that’s really cool that you got to go visit a concentration camp. It means so much to me that you understand how important it is because over half my family died in those camps. I hope you never forget, and at the same time when it was sad I hope you also understand that it is an amazing place of hope and example of the triumph of the human spirit.

Nathan: that was really cool you got to go there, nice descriptions.

Bridget: I know how you feel I get the same way when I listen to music. I like how you laid out your story.

Maddie: That must be so hard, I am so sorry about your loss.

Sayrn: that really makes me want to hear the rest of your story! It sounds exciting!

Blake: Good job! I moved to my freshman year I know how hard it is.

Ben: You’re a really good writer and your descriptions were really good.

Keith: Ok your really good at describing your sentences, I really want to know the rest of your story though. Yay keith!

Brice: That must have been so hard, but you did make double the friends :] but you’re a good writer

Kayla: You are so strong! I know a couple people who have cancer and it is incredibly hard, good luck with everything in your life.

Amy S.- Peas in a pod- I liked how she described t...

2007-01-24T06:56:00.002-08:00

Amy S.- Peas in a pod- I liked how she described the texture of the food

Leah- I like how she felt being home sick

Jake R. I like how he described the feeling that he got when he got the call.

Sara B. I like how she felt when she felt the fish

Colin. I like how he made me wonder about the stars

Lauren L. I like how she described being a big eighth grader

Aly. I like how she described how good of a friend she had

Kevin K. I like how he dicribed everything.

Matt. I like how he described the grass.

Julianna D. I like how she described the feeling that she got when she finally achieved her black belt

Kendra. I like how she told us how close that she is with her friends.

Jade. I really like how you described his girlfriend.

Kaitalin W. I think that her dad is a really good dad for helping those people.

Gabe. I like how he described how excited he was to get his gun

James. Did you really enjoy it as much as you thought that you would.

Jess. Why do you like Big and Rich so much

Molly. I like how she described the taste of the marshmallow in her mouth.

Margaux. I like how she described how she felt.

Alyssa. I like how she explained the difference of 6 million lives is 6 million lives

Nathan W. I like how he described how this trip was the best one ever

Madi. I like how she described the feeling.

Saryn. I like how she described how she could smell the cemetery.

Blake. I like how he described his feeling
Ben. I like how e only wanted the ipod and nothing else.

Keith. What happened.

Bryce. That feeling must of sucked.

Kayla. How did you get through this hard time.

THIS IS ALY!!!Amy: She did a really good job. I li...

2007-01-24T06:56:00.001-08:00

THIS IS ALY!!!
Amy: She did a really good job. I like how she vividly described most details of the night

Leah: It was really sad how she told some of the stuff, but it was also really cute how she described some of the stuff that brought back a lot of memories of way back when at naptime & what not.

Jake: It was horrible, but in a good way. It brought shivers down my spine to hear him write something that emotional and personal, but glad he shared that.

Sara: Fishies scare her. It was really sad, but good thing that she is trying to overcome it.

Colin: Good, confusing yes, but still really good. I liked it. He made a lot of the things that he described in his paper that made a lot of things so…awesome sounding.

Lauren: Really…kind of sad. Everyone went through a lot their last year of middle school, but the way she put that thing made it a lot more real to probably a lot of people.

Glen: I knew he traveled all over the world, but I didn’t know he went that many places. Yeah its true, I agree with him when he says that he’s more unique for seeing so many things before.

Kevin: Very cute, I loved his paper because he told it like the view point of the age he was talking about in his paper.

Matt: Well written, good point of view.

David: Good description of everything that had happened. Very sad, but good and personal so it makes up for that.

Julianna: Shows a good sense of accomplishment. It was very well spoken and she did a good job.

Kendra: very sweet. Talking about her “family” at her old school, it was really adorable. It was really sad though, when she told us about how she had to leave them.

Jade: AWWWW!!!! THAT WAS SO ADORABLE!!! I love Megan, she’s so sweet. And the way he put it all into a poem, was so perfect.

Kaitlan: Everything that she wrote was so touching and moving and everything. Personal, just glad it didn’t happen to her.

Josh: Good description, I like the way he described the mountains and his time in it.

Gabe: Short, but to the point, talking about his very first paintball gun.

James: Lacrosse seems to be his passion and he told that very well. Good way to put it and yeah, it was just good.

Jessie: Sweet how she talked about when she was little and the way she exhibited her love for singing.

Molly: She was very poient to what she was writing about and had a good way of talking about her love of her special place in the mountains.

Margaux: White water rafting, ah the joys of that. I like how she told about the details about her experience.

Alyssa: Inspirational. I love every descriptive word that she had to describe what she had seen back in the 7th grade.

Nathan: Good way of putting his trip to Europe, I like the way he was talking about the soda.

Brigid: Creative about the way she wrote about her room and her comfort place and the love of music in her life.

Madi: Sad that she was talking about her cousin’s death, it was moving.

Saryn: that was kinda scary, I wanna know what happens next.

Blake: reminded me of the first day of school, but in a good way.

Ben: Ah Christmas time. I love it.

Keith: he made a good point of his adrenaline rush, which made his piece really good.

Bryce: very sad, because that’s something that’s got to be very hard to go through.

Kayla: very, very personal. It was well written and everything like that. She did a great job.

Amy S: I liked the description of the couch, and...

2007-01-24T06:56:00.000-08:00

Amy S: I liked the description of the couch, and frosting… yum.

Leah: I remember first grade like that.  Great story.

Jake: I haven’t encountered something like that, but I know how it would feel, terrible.

Sara: Swimming with dolphins would be fun, at least for a little bit it got your mind of the fish.

Colin: I’ve wondered about that too, great story to get from that prompt.

Lauren: I moved almost every year before high school, it was hard to adjust sometimes but it helps to make friends.

Ally: Deep story, it’s great that you could share it.

Glen: I wish I could have experienced what you did, sounds like a great time.

Kevin: I have a friend that fell from a window the same way you almost did, he was fine, but he didn’t get ice cream… I think you win.

David C: Great detail, I’ve experienced things much like that a few times.

Julianna: I like the story, great description.

Kendra: I’ve had similar experiences with friends, those are tough. I liked the story.

Jade: Nice way to mix it up with a poem! You had great writing as well.

Kaitlan: Very deep story, those kinds of things are hard to deal with, glad you could share it!

Josh: Great writing, I liked the story. It sounds a bit familiar.

Gabe: Sounds just like when I get something, though I’m not allowed to get a paintball gun, oh well. 

James: Checking is definitely one of the best parts of lacrosse! It is a great sport. Great story.

Jess: It’s great to have a dream that stays with you always. I love your story, and that verse!

Molly: It’s wonderful being out doors, I liked your story a lot.

Margaux: Rafting is amazing, again, I loved your story.

Nathan: Great writing! Pretty descriptive.

Alyssa B: Amazing detail and great writing!

David: I wish I could go on that trip. I’d love to see those places! Great way to write about them.

Brigid: I liked your story, and the way you wrote it. Very good writing.

Madi: Thanks for sharing that story, that is a tough subject. Great story!

Saryn: Great story… What happens next?

Blake: I like your writing. Excellent story.

Ben: I can relate… very similar things happen all the time around me.

Keith: Great story. I like it a lot.

Bryce: Nearly happened to me as well, but I’m working to graduate on time. Great story.

Kayla: Thanks for sharing your story. Great writing. 

Coffeehouse Reading- Amy S. - She described the fi...

2007-01-24T06:55:00.000-08:00

Coffeehouse Reading

- Amy S. - She described the five senses great.
- Leah J. - She is good at dialog.
- Sara B. - She is deadly afraid of fish.
- Colin L. - He is a very deep thinker.
- Lauren L. - She is a great writer with a wide variety of writing.
- Aly E. - She described the alcohol good.
- Glen L. - He travels all around the world with his family.
- Kevin N. - He almost died, but he didn’t – he got ice cream.
- Matt D. - He was good at describing things.
- David C. - He wrote a good serious story.
- Juliana D. - That is cool that she is a black belt.
- Kendra V. - She described the past tense really good.
- Jade E. - He’s good at poetry.
- Kaitlan W. - Have you ever had a problem?
- Josh C. - Good description.
- Gabe W. - Do you still paintball?
- James N. - Did you ever have a big challenge in lacrosse?
- Jessica W. - That’s cool that she’s a country girl because there many left.
- Molly K. - Do you hike a lot with your family?
- Margaux L. - She is good at describing nature.
- Alyssa B. - Good word choice.
- Nathan W. - He travels to really cool places.
- Brigid I. - She has great description.
- Madi F. - I can relate to her experience because my friend just died in a car crash.
- Saryn S. - Great story with good verbs.
- Blake H. - Good word choice.
- Ben E. - Very dramatic.
- Keith S. - Good description.
- Bryce P. - That is sad when you got held back.
- Kayla - Great story. Good description.

Amy S.-I really liked how it felt like I was there...

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Amy S.-I really liked how it felt like I was there with your description. It was very nice and very well written.

Leah J.-It was really neat how you wrote it so that you could feel what you were going through.

Jake R.-I could feel your pain through your writing.

Sara B.-That’s really interesting to think about; you wrote very well about your fear.

Collin L.-Wow. That was really profound.

Lauren L.-I like how you described your feelings about new experiences.

Aly E.-Wow. I liked how you were able to write about something so personal. It was very well written.

Glen L.-I liked how you were able to describe all of these places. It was almost like I was there.

Kevin-I can visualize how scary looking that was, wow.

Matt-I liked how you described the sky. Good job.

David C.-You described everything very well. I felt like I was there.

Julianna D.A-I loved your descriptive words because I felt like I was there with you! Good job!

Kendra V.-It was neat how you could write about something so special. You seemed to be really close to your friends.

Jade B.-That’s really a sweet descriptive poem. It’s really pretty.

Kaitlan W.-That’s really deep; it’s really good. You write very well about your family.

Josh C.-I like the words you used to describe the scenery. I could visualize what it all looked like. Good job.

Gabe W.-I liked how you were able to describe the suspense.

James N.-It sounds like you really like lacrosse. That’s a good way to take out your frustration!

Molly K.-I can almost taste the s’mores. Good job!

Margaux L.-I like how you wrote about the water. I could hear it rush down.

Alyssa B.-The description of the sun was beautiful! I could see it through your writing.

Nathan W.-The trip sounded like a lot of a fun! I bet the Austrian soda was really interesting. Good job!

Brigid I.-That’s a really good description of your walls. I can visualize the mint green peeking through.

Madi-That’s really tough to think about. I’m sorry for your loss. You write very well about him.

Saryn S.-I liked how you were able to describe your fear to where I could imagine being there.

Blake H.-I like your description of the school bell. Good job.

Ben E.-Good job on describing your want of an iPod.

Keith S.-I like how you described your nervousness so vividly.

Bryce-Your description of despair was very interesting. Good.

Kayla-I can relate to you because that disease runs in my family as well. Nice description.

Amy S. -She used really descriptive adjectives Lea...

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Amy S.
-She used really descriptive adjectives

Leah
-I like how its in the point of view of a 1st grader and how she describes being nervous

Jake
-really sad story

Sara B
-I like her story of the dolphins and how she had to somewhat overcome her fear

Collin
-descriptive adjectives

Lauren
-I can relate to her story because I wrote about leaving friends.

Aly
-Really interesting and scary story, I probably wouldn’t have been able to share something like that with the entire class

Glen
- I want to travel too.

Kevin
- Scary! I like how he focused more on the ice cream than what happened.

Matt
- cool

David C.
- I like the point of view that he used.

Julianna
- good descriptions

Jade
- really cute

Kaitlan
- I don’t know you could have gone through that. Your story about your aunt is really scary.

Josh Cook
- Used senses a lot at the beginning with the description of wind and river.

Gabe
- You did a good description of your excitement.

James
- Lacrosse is cool

Jessica
- Music is cool. I hope you’re famous someday.

Molly
- Really used senses well. I like your description of smores.

Margaux
- I’ve always wanted to go rafting, you made it sound like fun.

Alyssa
- your description of the sunset was really cool.

Nathan
- I want to travel around, so it’s neat that you already have.

Brigdid
- descriptive

Madi
- sad, I’m sorry

Saryn
- that sounds scary, what happened next?

Blake
- I like your comparison of the silence to the chime of the bell

Ben
- Ipods are sweet

Keith
- good descriptiveness…what happened?

Bryce
-I didn’t know you were held back…sad

Kayla
- Its cool that you were willing to share that with people you don’t know.

Amy S. - You did a great job describing the smells...

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Amy S. - You did a great job describing the smells.

Jake R. - Good job describing how you felt when you heard the news of what happened to your friends.

Leah J. – You did a good job describing the teacher and I got a clear picture of what she was like.

Sara B. – Good job describing how you felt in the water when the fish was touching you.

Colin L. – You did a good job using word choice.

Lauren L. – You did a great job describing the smell of the new school.

Aly E. – You did a really good job at describing how you felt after drinking the shots.

Glenn L. – I liked the way you described the different countries you have been to.

Kevin M. – I like the way you described the feeling of falling.

Matt D. I liked the way you described how the air felt when you where on the golf course.

David C.- I liked the way you described the how you felt after this happened and the way your emotions felt.

Julianna D.- I like the way that you described how you felt when you got it.

Kendra V. – You did a good job with detail and I got a clear picture.

Jade B. – You did I good job with word choice and rhyming.

Kaitlan W. – I like the way you described how you felt.

Josh C. – You did a good job giving a clear picture of what happened.

Gabe W. - You did a good job leading up to what you got.

James- You did a good job explaining how and why you got into it.

Jessica W. – I like how you quoted from the bible.

Molly K - Good use of word choice.

Alyssa B. – You had a lot of detail and it gave me a really clear picture.

Nathan W. – I liked when you said it was a “sensory overload” and the way the tasted.

Brigid I. – You used a lot of detail and it gave me a clear picture.

Madi F. – This was a good piece. I’m sorry that it happened to you.

Saryn – I like the way you described how you felt.

Blake H – I like when you compared things to other things.

Ben E. – You did a good job showing just how much you wanted the ipod.

Keith – Good job describing how you felt.

Bryce – I think that you get a good job describing how you felt.

Kayla – Good job sharing and giving good detail.

Amy- Amazing descriptions on everything, very clea...

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Amy- Amazing descriptions on everything, very clear
Jake- Conveyed the sadness in his mother’s voice real well
Leah- good show of emotion
Sara- I liked the line, “big, ugly, fish stared me right in the face”
Colin- Way deep
Lauren- nice way of describing the old school
Aly- Extremely vivid description of how your body felt
Glen- good list of places
Matt- described the environment really well
David- good description of how you felt
Juliana- good description of the sense of accomplishment “felt like I was floating on a cloud”
Kendra- flowed really well, was pleasant to listen to
Jade- nicely done
Kaitlan- very good build up of saying later that her aunt was now walking
Josh- nice description of how the forest makes you feel
Gabe- built up really well
James- I likes the line “I like to hit people”
Jess- way to go, you rocked a lot of boats with that paper!
Molly- Wow! That really put me in the environment, I could almost see it
Margaus- super fun, I really enjoyed the one time I went white water rafting so I really enjoyed your paper
Alyssa B- that was some really intense description!
Nathan- your paper really portrayed your appreciation for history and culture
Brigid- I was able to visualize the room really well, I liked your idea of using music to help you cool down too
Madi- had a lot of power behind it
Blake- good job, really good descriptions
Ben- well done
Keith- you described the feeling really well
Brice- wow, that really showed the story
Kayla- wooooh! That’s awosome!

Amy S: You did a nice job of describing the settin...

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Amy S: You did a nice job of describing the setting and meeting of your friend.

Jake: Nice job for having the courage to share that in class. You really had a special bond with these people, I’m really sorry that this happened to you.

Leah: Nice job making us “feel” the piece and the nervous feeling on the first day of school.

Sara: I really enjoyed hearing about your experiences with fish and the story behind the whole thing.

Colin: I like how you described how small we really are in this world, and your perception of reality.

Lauren: You really described the school well and the whole process of trying to fit in at a new place.

Aly: I had now idea that you went through this. This is a really personal story and the struggles you went through make me really feel for you.

Glen: It was really interesting to hear about the different places and experiences you’ve encountered.

Kevin: Nice job of really setting up the scene and bringing me into the piece. That isn’t something everyone gets to experience.

Matt: Nice job of describing the setting of the golf course at night.

Julianna: I really enjoyed you describing your moment of accomplishment in getting your black belt.

Kendra: It was interesting to hear how close you were to these friends and how you’ve managed to get through, leaving them in high school.

Jade: Nice poem! I really enjoyed all the descriptions and the emotion in your piece.

Kaitlan: It’s really interesting to hear about your experiences with your dad helping alcoholics and all you’ve been through.

Josh: I love the mountains too! It’s really fun to hear about your experiences in the mountains with your family.

Gabe: Nice job describing the anticipation of getting your first paintball gun.

James: It was cool to see kind of your journey through the sport.

Jessie: I never knew you were so into country and singing! That’s really cool and you wrote a nice piece! I thought it was interesting explaining why you were so into it.

Molly: That was a really cool experience on the beach and you described it well.

Margaux: That’s really cool that you raft! I’ve never been and it was interesting to hear about your experiences.

Alyssa B: This piece really touched me because I was there also. You’re pretty amazing.

Nathan: Hey, that trip sounds somewhat familiar…nice job kind of summing it all up. I <3 Band trips!!!

Bridgid: You really used nice descriptions. I like how you described your music.

Madi: You wrote a really nice piece. I’m sorry this happened to you.

Saryn: This was an interesting experience. I want to know what happens next!

Blake: Nice job describing the first day of high school and your experience.

Ben: You described how much you wanted the iPod really well.

Keith: You did a nice job of letting me feel the piece.

Bryce: Nice job describing something not everyone experiences. I’m sorry that happened to you.

Kayla: I never knew you are going through this. That’s pretty incredible.

Coffeehouse ReadingAmy-the way you described the t...

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Coffeehouse Reading

Amy-the way you described the taste and touch of what you ate was good because it made you feel like you were experiencing it.
Jake-the way you described how you felt was powerful because I could relate and it made me sad.
Leah-the way you described how you were homesick was powerful because I could relate to your experience
Sara-I could relate to the feeling of fish swimming around you because I absolutely hate the feeling of fish rubbing against you.
Collin-I could relate to the feeling of looking at stars because I love to watch the stars.
Lauren-I really liked the way you described how you were feeling, it made me feel like I was right there with you.
Aly- the way you described how you were feeling when you were drinking was powerful because I have never experienced that.
Glen- I really liked the way you described what you saw because it makes me wish I could see what you have seen all over the world.
Kevin- the way you described how you were feeling when you were hanging upside down from your second story window was powerful because it really made me realize what you were feeling.
Matt- I could relate to how you felt when you stared at the sky because I love to watch the stars in the sky.
David- the way you described how you were feeling was powerful because it made me feel like I was there watching the drama happen.
Juliana- I could relate to the feeling of success after you accomplish something.
Kendra- I really liked the way you described how you felt, it made me feel like I could relate
Jade- I really liked the way he wrote it-it was very sweet and touching!
Kaitlan- I really liked the way you described how you felt
Josh- I could relate to the beauty of the mountains-I absolutely love being in the mountains
Gabe- I have never played paintball-is it fun?
James- I can relate to how “cool” lacrosse is. My brother plays it and I love watching his games!
Jess- I have never experienced such a love for something as you have. What else do you want to do besides sing country?
Margaux- How often did you and your dad go rafting? I have gone rafting once and it is so much fun to just be surrounded by nature.
Alyssa B. - When did you visit Germany?
Nathan- I have always wanted to visit Germany because my grandparents are from there. How often do you travel?
Brigid- I really like to enjoy listening to music when I am upset-I can really relate to how much it helps calm you down.
Madi- It must be really hard to lose someone-I can’t imagine what it would feel like.
Saryn- the way you were describing how you felt and how everything was looking made me feel like I was there with you
Blake- I can relate to not having friends in your high school. Many of my friends did not go to the same high school as me.
Ben- I can relate to wanting something so bad like an ipod. Before I got my cell phone, I felt the same way.
Keith- I’m confused to what you are talking about. What are you talking about?
Bryce- the way you described how you felt made me feel like I was right there with you.
Kayla- What is the disease? How did you get it? What do you have to do?

AmyYou describe the feelings and senses well! Fun...

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Amy
You describe the feelings and senses well! Fun light and fast reading, you really incorporated everything well.

Jake
It is kind of depressing, good focus on the tough topic and you seem to be able to make things very fluid easily. It’s truly hard to lose a friend, and you bring the sadness to the room with little effort

Leah
Not bad the fear of the first day of school ever is a great topic! Great description and you are able to bring the reader into the story with ease.

Sara
I’m so sorry that you are afraid of fish, good description of fear.

Colin
You make me feel small… Not a bad story, so many facts good conveying of info.

Lauren
Fear is difficult to convey and you found how to do it.

Aly
You are very daring and courageous and it is a very scary true story.

Glen
I love to travel and you seem to convey the amazing places of the world well

Kevin
Into making trouble, terrifying and amazing, and well you got ice cream out of the whole thing too!

Matt
Good description of detail!

David
Sad and depressing and yet so captivating and peaceful, good feelings through writing.

Julianna
Good bringing of accomplishment into your writing

Kendra
Wow you know what to say and you get straight to the point. Short, concise, good imagery and feeling of hope.

Jade
Nice description of feelings and happiness.

Kaitlan
Scary and captivating, unafraid to tell and bringing a new light on a terrible and painful subject.

Josh
Good detail and imagery

Gabe
Strong use of the five senses

James
The story of a new experience and new thrilling things happening

Jessie
Wow great description of the country way of life! Great description of hearing and sight. Fun memories and happy feelings in the life.

Molly
That sounds like a ton of fun! It seems that you can still see and feel this event even though it has already passed.

Margaux
Rafting is so captivating and amazing and you bring new light to it

Alyssa B.
Amazing capturing of a terrible place

Brigid
Binging to light the light touch of music and then the change to another piece and great sound!

Madi
Great play of emotion inside the sadness of a terrible event.

Saryn
The terrifying nature of life and people in it, good descriptions.

Blake
Different topic and a new light on an old topic

Ben
Good description of careless joy

Keith
Short concise and to the point

Bryce
Good description of fear and of everything around you

Kayla
A terrible awful experience and good strong info about it.

Coffeehouse Reading-Amy S.: Amy can make friends v...

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Coffeehouse Reading

-Amy S.: Amy can make friends very easily.
-Jake R.: Jake has a lot of close friends.
-Leah J.: The sense description is above average.
-Sara B.: Sara has a lot of good stories.
-Lauren L.: Lauren has been through a lot of hard times.
-Aly E.: Aly is really strong; she pulled out of a severe addiction.
-Glenn L.: Glen’s family likes to travel all over the world.
-Kevin N.: His life was in jeopardy, and he stands here today to tell the story.
-Matt D.: He had good imagery.
-David C.: David shows emotions very well in his writing.
-Juliana D.: She described her emotions very well.
-Kendra V.: Kendra has a lot of really good close friends.
-Jade B.: Jade is a very good poet.
-Kaitlen W.: Her dad is a good guy.
-Josh C.: Josh likes to be outdoors, especially when he’s in the mountains.
-Gabe W.: He enjoys shooting at other people, with paint.
-James N.: He likes to play lacrosse.
-Jess W.: She wants to be a country singer.
-Molly K.: Molly is very close to her family.
-Margaux L.: She has an adventures side to her.
-Alyssa B.: Alyssa has very good description.
-Nathan W.: Nathan likes to travel to different places in the world.
-Brigid I.: She likes to listen to music, to clear her mind.
-Madi F.: Madi’s cousin died in a car accident, she is very sad.
-Saryn S.: Saryn uses good verbs
-Blake H.: Blake is good at revealing changes in people.
-Ben E.: Ben wants an iPod.
-Keith S.: He has good description of nervousness.
-Bryce P.: Bryce was held back, he was really mad.
-Kayla. : Kayla has a disease, she’s been through surgery before.

Amy S. I enjoyed your description of the “warm fuz...

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Amy S. I enjoyed your description of the “warm fuzzy feeling” of the blanket.

Jake: That was really brave to share your story. Thank you.

Leah: Awesome job describing your first day of school. I really thought your description of your mom leaving was great

Sara: Thanks for sharing your fish story

Colin: I really love your piece. The way you described feeling small was very good, I enjoyed the “ever expanding universe”

Lauren: You read aloud really well, they way you gradually got faster conveyed the frantic race of trying to fit in.

Aly: Wow. That’s really brave that you shared that with us. You’re a great writer and I respect you a lot for sharing this.

Glen: YAY Austria…. I mean, yeah. That’s so cool you’ve seen all these things and are still pretty young. I like your description of a little feeling of insight.

Kevin: Good job setting up the piece. You made me anticipate the rest of the story

Matt: I enjoyed your opening line, it easily draws the reader in

Culpy: I wuve you Culpy.. You’re really good at describing… stuff. You know what I mean and that’s what matters.

Julianna: I really enjoyed your description of joy and the happy feeling of accomplishment

Kendra: Good job describing the close friendship you had during elementary school.

Jade: wow.. that was absolutely amazing

Kaitlan: That’s really cool of your dad. I’m glad that their struggles influenced you and others in a positive way.

Josh: I enjoyed your description of the mountains. Especially when you described time slowing to a stop

Gabe: You did a good job describing your anticipation.

James: I enjoyed hearing about your lacrosse experience

Jesse: I never knew you wanted to sing. I think that your determination is awesome and I especially enjoy your description of feeling at home on stage.

Molly: Great descripton of the calmness of the lake.

Margaux: That sounds like so much fun. I enjoyed your description of rafting

Nathan: Yeah… pretty much  I liked your description of the Almdudler (even though it’s nasty) I <3 Vienna

Bridged: You used really vivid descriptions. Great Job

Madi: You described your grief really well

Saryn: You described the physical effects of fear very well.

Blake: I liked your description of everyone lingering to make last minute touches to their lunch plans

Ben: Good job. I liked you’re your description of needing the iPod instead of wanting it

Keith: Good job describing your nerves by using physical effects such as sweaty palms

Bryce: Nice job describing your frustration at yourself

Kayla: That’s really brave of you to have gone throught that and then shared it with us.

I had things in common with...SaraB: I have the sa...

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I had things in common with...

SaraB:
I have the same problem with grades and getting focused in school. I know I haven't been trying my hardest in school and I know it I need to change my effort but I never have the motivation.

Leah:
I am really afraid of being raped or anything like that too. My best friend in 4th grade was raped and ever since I saw how it affected her, and me, I've been more aware of stuff like that.

I also hate it when people think i am not a person...

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I also hate it when people think i am not a person who takes playing with sports serious.

From MargauxIt surprised me when Sara said she was...

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From Margaux
It surprised me when Sara said she was afraid of all fish because some are just really harmless.
Also it surprised me that Amy has a fear of someone throwing up because I never knew someone could have a fear of that.